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Listening to: New Found Glory, Understatement
Okay guys... if you never do anything else for me EVER, PLZ help me out with my writing. I just submitted "Graffiti Spirit" and I need some serious feedback on it.
HELP ME OUT HERE!!!
Nagol
Graffiti SpiritLupe Santos closed his eyes and breathed deeply, envisioning his canvas and what was to go on it. The smells of the air combined to create a strangely bittersweet aroma. He pushed it from his mind and focused on the task at hand. Slowly, he smiled. “Tranqillo, pero emocionado. Tranquil, but emotional,” he said to himself. Thoroughly satisfied with his mind’s image, he pulled the gas mask over his beanie and placed it over his mouth. Brushing his short brown hair from his face, he picked up a spray can and started his work.Graffiti Spirit
His hand moving smoothly across the wall, he began to draw the outlines of his graffiti. He made no so
Anna's Valentine's Day Story“Girl, he is totally out of your league,” my friends said. But I wasn’t listening. I was too busy having a cosmic moment with him.Anna's Valentine's Day Story
Him. Shawne Tarry. Resident jock, pretty boy, junior, but surprisingly enough, the kindest person in our high school. I was in love with him.
Me. Anna Rose. Goth, makeup obsessed, sophomore, and slightly insane white romantic.
You know, most “normal kids” wouldn’t spend half-a glance at someone like me. Cutter, slut, Emo, bulimic, freak, tomboy, bitch, I’d heard it all before. But, who cares? Certainly not Shawne. Especially since he’d actually talked to me. ASKED ME OUT. I w
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Intimate
Love Openness Vindicate my Feelings Eternally Yours
Youthful Passion Outwardly Loving Understanding
Please Be Mine this Valentine’s Day
Sincerely, Your Secret Admirer
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WELCOME TO THE NOVTNA FAMILY STORE!!! That’s what the sign always says. That sign represents my life. I hate that sign…
Segei Novtna was contemplating his life outside the small shop in the cold, Moscow air. The sunglasses on his face covered his brown eyes and thick eyebrows. Everyone told him that he looked really dumb wearing sunglasses when there was no sunlight out, but he didn’t care. It made him feel more comfortable knowing that people couldn’t see what he was looking at or what he was thinking through his eyes. He pulled his coat on tighter as a cold br
::The Poem Of My Life::You told me you wouldn't leave me alone again... But look at me now! I'm alone, I'm at a loss You broke a promise Is that how you want it?::The Poem Of My Life::
You were my only armour Downgraded... From gold to bronze
You always say 'This is the last time' But I know it's not And when I try to talk You start to walk Saying 'I don't wanna hear it'
The pain I feel I better take a pill To null the pain
I try to see the better in things... But there is no silver lining! It's dull and tattered, You've abused t
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[approaches a set of doors, tests] Locked. HI-YAH!
[he kicks the doors, which open] Unlocked. -----Razor from Swat Kats
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What are ya gonna do about it?
Sorry, but you ARE welcome...
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Ugggggghhhhhh... need......
sugar...
Long live generic-ness!
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[approaches a set of doors, tests] Locked. HI-YAH!
[he kicks the doors, which open] Unlocked. -----Razor from Swat Kats
...man. I need to think of something new to say than just, "No problem!" God, you'd think a writer, someone who freakin' uses words ALL THE TIME could come up with something creative...
Oh... umm... are you still here? Sorry...
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Ugggggghhhhhh... need......
sugar...
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[approaches a set of doors, tests] Locked. HI-YAH!
[he kicks the doors, which open] Unlocked. -----Razor from Swat Kats
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"Believe in your dreams, and they'll believe in you..."-Kayla
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K.
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